Thursday, 26 December 2019

Whats Outside

Here is another Summer Learning Journey post for Day 3 Week 2 Activity 2 year 6-8. For this task I was told to write a ten sentence short story about whatever I wanted as long as it was ten sentences. What I found hard while making this post was trying to find what to write about. Here is my post about Whats Outside.
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  1. BerenSLJ9 January 2020 at 14:19

    Hi Sophie,

    Oh, that is a creepy story. It sent chills down my spine, well done! I am glad you found something to write about in the end. Sometimes finding inspiration can be hard, but looking out the window can be a great way to get your mind buzzing with ideas.

    I love some of the descriptive language you have used like “a piercing scream” and “a shadowy figure” and “red as blood”. They help to paint a vivid picture, which is especially key in telling scary stories.

    What do you think would happen next? Would your character talk to the shadowy figure, or would they try and run away?

    Thanks for sharing this story Sophie, I hope you had fun writing it :)

    Beren

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  2. Anonymous17 January 2020 at 08:39

    Thanks for the nice comment, Beren! I think the character would try to talk to the devil but then realise that he should ran when he had a chance because a strike of lightning followed by thunder would burst through the sky. Then he would look in the mirror and see the devil right behind him. He had no way out! For some reason I like to write scary stories but the next night I will probably have nightmares about my own work!

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    1. BerenSLJ17 January 2020 at 12:09

      Kia ora Sophie,

      Oh goodness, what a scary ending! I wonder what the man did to bring the devil to his door. Maybe it's a cautionary tale, or maybe he was just unlucky? How spooky!

      Where did you get the inspiration for this? Do you read/watch lots of scary stories?

      Oh no, having nightmares about your own work is not ideal haha!

      Beren

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  3. Anonymous19 January 2020 at 20:35

    Thanks for the amazing reply, Beren! I actually just think it all up and I never ever watch any scary movies!

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  4. Hannah.I2 February 2020 at 14:57

    Hello Sophie, Hannah here. I like your short story I was really good. Next time you could add some describing words. From Hannah

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